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I didn’t sign up for this week because
I felt so bad about not getting around to read everyone else’s 8 last week. Sorry.
Watford FC won an important game and so celebrating seemed like a good idea.
Alcohol bad.
As
I'm only a weekend writer of Romance, Darrah is still having trouble with Sark
Hale Tarla. In a time long past in our history, a Sarkisian ship is stranded on
Earth. Assimilation is at an early stage but it has not proven to be an easy
option for either people. Now, Hale has been assigned to Darrah and her arm of
men. His role is to smooth over any diplomatic - or worse - problems that might
arise in the Outlands, where the Sarkisians were allowed to settle, when they
are sent to find the missing human heir to the Thorn Throne, Erishdren. Rogue
Sarkisians are thought to have been behind the abduction.
In this piece I have returned to Darrah. She has been
facing her friend, Rylo, the Factor - second-in-command in her Arm of men – since he touched her
shoulder to attract her attention. Rylo is worried. Darrah is still frayed and
on edge after Hale goaded her into attacking him so he could prove a point:
that in single combat, between a Sarkisian and one of her men, it would not be the human
who came out the victor. They were both burned by the encounter.
I missed out a small gap where Hale explains his past,
and my plot.
“Rylo?”
“With you, Koman.”
Darrah stared beyond
her Factor towards the mountains, around the clearing, then down at the ground
near her feet.
Rylo brought his bow up
and tapped it against the one Darrah held, armed and ready. “Without enemies, you hone your skills on rodents? I feel sorry for the scurries, already.”
“Never could abide
creatures that get the first gnaw on my food. I don’t mind the sharing, but
tiny tooth marks push me over the edge.”
DONALD
MAASS WRITE TIP #92
What’s
your antagonist missing? What hasn’t he
yet seen, figured out or found? Plant
that discovery.
Hale
has been working out what he was missing.
The first gnaw on my food---so descriptive. Really sets the tone.
ReplyDeleteAnd it made me giggle a bit too.
Hi Violet
DeleteThank you. I'm glad you found it funny. It was the tension breaker.
Plus, I realised mice had found their way into my house when I saw tiny teeth marks on a potato. I went from laid back to vengeful harpy in about two seconds ;)
Yuck! I'd go after them too. Tiny tooth marks would bug me.
ReplyDeleteHi Kate
DeleteIt was the tooth marks that set me off too.
Love the hint of humor in something that doesn't feel as if it should be funny. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteHi Joanne
DeleteI think that's what people often do: if things are bad, they panic but if they are terrible, they joke. ;)
Eww- I couldn't share with them either.
ReplyDelete~Summer
I know - scurries are the bane of civilisation ;) I knew that even before I found out about the peeing habits of mice. *eww
DeleteYucky. Just kill them.
ReplyDeleteHi Elaine
DeleteI'm not sure she really has it in for scurries. In a siege situation, they make good eating. *hehehe
I like the first gnaw on the food bit, but I wouldn't wanna eat that. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteHi Frank
DeleteChoice! If you get there first, you enjoy that bite-free eating ;)
Oh, that was wonderful! The background information was very helpful as well. Putting the dialogue in context makes it more powerful. Is this a wip or due for release? I really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteI love the dialogue! Excellent banter :-) "first gnaw on food. The scurries." Great choices :-) Good 8. :-)
ReplyDeleteI just wanna knoware you the same to be married to Joe Smith
ReplyDeleteare you till thereall these comments come from a year ago
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