|THOUGHTS HAVE BEEN |
HURTING MY HEAD
A great many people think they are thinking when they are really rearranging their prejudices. - William James (1842 - 1910)
No one knows what we’re thinking unless we choose to reveal them.
Even when we reveal our thoughts, we censor them and only vocalise the thought that is most suitable, appropriate or powerful.
In writing thoughts and lectures directed internally can be used to:
· heighten emotion
· lighten the scene
· allow an additional insight into a character
· give characters an distinct voice
· reveal a character’s motivations
· can reveal a character’s conflict
Thoughts can slow the pace of a scene.
Although thoughts never need speech marks, any kind of visual marking can be distracting.
I have been experimenting with minimal punctuation:
Mortimer glanced around his L-terminal, checking to see when the Staff activated the chrys-chip implant switch.
Sometimes there was a look or someone asked a question. Yawning. Rubbing foreheads. There was never a good reason for stunning learners. It was a painful abuse of power.
Mortimer glanced around his L-terminal to check when the Staff activated the chrys-chip implant switch.
Yawning. Rubbing foreheads. There’s never a good reason for stunning learners. Sometimes there was a look or someone asked a question. It’s a painful abuse of power.
DO YOU USE ITALICS TO SHOW THOUGHTS? DO YOU CHANGE TENSES IF YOU DO?