Showing posts with label SIX SENTENCES DRAWN Darrah and her bow. Show all posts
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Sunday, 23 October 2011

SIX SENTENCES - DRAWN: DARRAH'S BOW

I'll be under the third umbrella on the left ;)
SUNDAY!


I forgot to sign up for - 6 SENTENCE SUNDAY - oops.


However, my SIX SENTENCES FOR SUNDAY come from DRAWN.


If you have any suggestions or ideas I would be delighted to hear them. As Danette, last week, reminded me it is important to make consistent choices when describing the way an MC views the action and interactions.


Voice is created by the way each writer controls:

  • the order of the words in the sentence 
  • the use of punctuation marks, and 
  • vocabulary selection.



Darrah is The Arm of Elthor's Corp - this gives her responsibility for the men she selects to train and to lead. Her secret mission is to find the Regal's heir who has been taken. The evidence suggests that The Sarkisians - who, with their unusual powers and their need to feed directly from the living, are hated and feared - are responsible. Darrah, who has personal reasons to want all that race to husk and crumble is finding it hard deal with her reactions to Hale who has been sent to find out who, or what, is trying to destroy the fragile peace between their peoples.



Still shaking, Darrah stood with her back against the broad trunk of a tree, her fingers curled around her light bow, every sense alert.
The bow would only be useful if she was close enough to stab with the pointed tip at his exposed neck, but he’d have to be damn close and she’d have to be damn lucky. She imagined drawing an arrow from her bag, it would take too long. Too noisy. Her sensitive fingertips were tracking tools too, so she didn’t usually track through the forest with an arrow nocked and ready. She wouldn’t make that mistake again. 

I'm on holiday this week. Corfu. I've never been to Greece before. Culture, sand, sea and free alcohol, I'm loving it already ;)