tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post5143283274984419153..comments2024-03-11T22:54:06.514+00:00Comments on Wordsmithing: SIX SENTENCE SUNDAY - DRAWNAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-25976019435686002052011-09-28T01:02:55.912+01:002011-09-28T01:02:55.912+01:00I'm so glad you're participating in this!!...I'm so glad you're participating in this!!! I love your writing and try to read whenever you post something you're working on :) <br /><br />I like this. I'm already intrigued by the runner guy. Sounds like she's been watching him for some time. I wonder where exactly that will lead and what he'll say when he finds out!lexcadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18094072290983267178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-81979257483365673252011-09-27T18:32:46.690+01:002011-09-27T18:32:46.690+01:00Hmmm... I was confused by 'hide hidden' in...Hmmm... I was confused by 'hide hidden' in the first line... but you have very nice descriptions :)1000th.monkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16835988128285459745noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-80779917013140885782011-09-27T09:42:42.346+01:002011-09-27T09:42:42.346+01:00Hi MC, Danete and Elyzabeth
Thanks for your commen...Hi MC, Danete and Elyzabeth<br />Thanks for your comments and thoughts *grins<br />The repetitious nature of the sentence is an attempt at making Darrah's breathlessness translate into the text itself.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-32946741138158071082011-09-27T00:35:49.466+01:002011-09-27T00:35:49.466+01:00Lovely visuals, very nice. Since you asked our opi...Lovely visuals, very nice. Since you asked our opinion, I also wonder about what the poster before me (Danette) said. She has a good point.<br />:)Elyzabeth M. VaLeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04043328793216518359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-61715212875617806482011-09-26T22:56:01.460+01:002011-09-26T22:56:01.460+01:00Very nice. I especially like that she pulled herse...Very nice. I especially like that she pulled herself "closer to the edge". It feels metaphoric there. Quick question: Do you need to state that he will run and that he is a runner in the next sentence or would it tighten it up to leave out "and run" since you have that he is a runner in the last? Just wondering since I don't know the rest of the paragraph...Danettehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15043881305977386629noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-864876596488629742011-09-26T18:41:56.270+01:002011-09-26T18:41:56.270+01:00Really enjoyed this extract. Vivid imagery and te...Really enjoyed this extract. Vivid imagery and tension!MC Rogersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13735238884673302488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-34763919300529774942011-09-25T21:45:54.435+01:002011-09-25T21:45:54.435+01:00Thanks Joanne :)Thanks Joanne :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-22261359274647363942011-09-25T21:42:38.050+01:002011-09-25T21:42:38.050+01:00I love that. It's very evocative. Great visual...I love that. It's very evocative. Great visuals, great emotion. Draws me right in. Great six!Joanne Stewarthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17708364499624604625noreply@blogger.com