tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post4548387409232743024..comments2024-03-11T22:54:06.514+00:00Comments on Wordsmithing: SIX SENTENCES - STARRING FROM THE NEW START ;)Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-8036859296692705192011-07-12T00:17:17.019+01:002011-07-12T00:17:17.019+01:00I like where you're going with this. There is ...I like where you're going with this. There is the possibility of so much tension in these short phrases but I think you could (once again) do fill it in to make it even more tense... the steam in the air filling the air between the tiger and boy, something like that. Also, that tiger gnawing at the glass... there is a picture you might check out http://whyevolutionistrue.wordpress.com/2011/07/11/at-least-it-wasnt-an-image-of-jesus/ <br />A similar idea- an owl who didn't realize the glass was there and left his imprint behind. You might say something like that here??? I don't know...Danettehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15043881305977386629noreply@blogger.com