tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post1547574810306241019..comments2024-03-11T22:54:06.514+00:00Comments on Wordsmithing: CAN YOU GUESS THE CHARACTER'S AGE?Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-64155761083665200172011-12-11T22:12:25.273+00:002011-12-11T22:12:25.273+00:00Hi Susan
Thanks for calling by and commenting. Mor...Hi Susan<br />Thanks for calling by and commenting. Mortimer has a little more growing to do.<br /><br />Hi Crystal<br />Closer. "Parent" is some serious world building, but she does maintain the distance between them, with difficulty.<br /><br />Hi Monkey<br />You picked the exact age I pictured Mortimer when I first began. You were spot-on-with-spots ;)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-76366800464671541072011-12-11T00:12:36.867+00:002011-12-11T00:12:36.867+00:00I'm thinking 12. I really like how you use the...I'm thinking 12. I really like how you use the word "parent" for describing his mom. It helps shows the distant relationship he has with his mom. Great job!.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03335427276116292574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-16344851541646750912011-12-10T17:25:19.678+00:002011-12-10T17:25:19.678+00:00@ Elaine
Ha! I'm glad I was the closest ;) th...@ Elaine<br /><br />Ha! I'm glad I was the closest ;) this has a very *Ender's game* feel about it.<br /><br />Oh, and you were BANG on for mine. 15 for the MC and Triss is 17<br /><br />:)1000th.monkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16835988128285459745noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-27417991556186028382011-12-10T16:32:39.452+00:002011-12-10T16:32:39.452+00:00Hi :) I hopped over from Brenda's blog.
Th...Hi :) I hopped over from Brenda's blog. <br /><br />This is a really interesting beginning. I think I'll go with 13. (Maybe 14 or a few years different on either side--considering he's grown up in a very different culture and so might feel/sound different...)SFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05126306619182458823noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-58050283487733204632011-12-10T06:37:31.365+00:002011-12-10T06:37:31.365+00:00I was under the impression he was way younger, lik...I was under the impression he was way younger, like 7-9.1000th.monkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16835988128285459745noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-57172083062991402152011-12-09T10:37:25.871+00:002011-12-09T10:37:25.871+00:00Hi GE
Thank you :) I'm glad you were drawn int...Hi GE<br />Thank you :) I'm glad you were drawn into Mortimer's world.<br /><br />Hi Francesca<br />Thank you :) I'm with your assessment of Mortimer as youngish.<br /><br />Hi Sharon<br />THANK YOU!!! Consistency is the key in such a short paragraph. It has never contained Mortimer's parent's name before. That was a pure case of knowing too much in a re-write situation.<br /><br />Hi Julia<br />For a woman who spends as little time with her son as possible, Mortimer's parent is hugely influential.<br /><br /><br />Hi Denise<br />That was a kind thought, the jargon is such an important part of scene setting.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-23750876769884403572011-12-09T10:09:38.447+00:002011-12-09T10:09:38.447+00:00I'd guess 14?? His parents seem to still be a ...I'd guess 14?? His parents seem to still be a huge part of his life.<br /><br />JuliaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-45997881925628818112011-12-09T04:09:25.149+00:002011-12-09T04:09:25.149+00:0013 perhaps? I like the cold dynamic between him a...13 perhaps? I like the cold dynamic between him and his "parent". It's interesting. I noticed you called her "parent" "mom" and by her name in this section. Perhaps some more consistency? At the very least it seems odd that he would think of her by her first name and mom in the same section. Good luck!Sharon Baylisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17361550815860670756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-28240427524822712262011-12-09T02:23:58.685+00:002011-12-09T02:23:58.685+00:00Hi Elaine! I'm beginning to think everyone but...Hi Elaine! I'm beginning to think everyone but me writes MG or YA. I'd say your guy is about 14. Love his name and you have the jargon down.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-15279633077949912932011-12-09T00:43:37.321+00:002011-12-09T00:43:37.321+00:00I'm going to say 13. He seems youngish, but li...I'm going to say 13. He seems youngish, but like he's starting to grow up. Great intro!Francesca Zappiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16876692064254806825noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-14864681728552799202011-12-09T00:25:53.292+00:002011-12-09T00:25:53.292+00:00I'd have to guess 15. I'm definitely intri...I'd have to guess 15. I'm definitely intrigued by your entry!Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-41066279055606170622011-12-09T00:25:36.930+00:002011-12-09T00:25:36.930+00:00THANK YOU!!!! to everyone who commented. I appreci...THANK YOU!!!! to everyone who commented. I appreciate the time everyone took to offer ideas. You are all soo quick. Tomorrow is my day to read and comment.<br /><br />I may need to word count again before sending off my entry.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-2560715814968246772011-12-09T00:22:51.543+00:002011-12-09T00:22:51.543+00:00Hi Kelly
Thank you. Welcome to Mortimer's worl...Hi Kelly<br />Thank you. Welcome to Mortimer's world. ;)<br /><br />Hi Julie<br />*grins Thanks. I'm thinking Mortimer. Way much harder now ;)<br /><br />Hi Jesi<br />Mortimer's is not an easy life. His parent keeps busy.<br /><br />Hi Charity<br />*grins Thank you. I'm glad you read and found yourself wondering about Mortimer's world.<br />Good luck with your entry.<br /><br />Hi Christopher<br />Poor Mortimer. He is growing up fast. I'm glad you were gripped by the first sentence but I'm worried about the first paragraph now. <br /><br />Hi Erica<br />Yow. I'll tell Mortimer to get on with growing. Maybe he is precocious ;)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-62886068704147181682011-12-08T22:48:17.966+00:002011-12-08T22:48:17.966+00:001414Erica Winghttp://crapfiction.wordpress.com/2011/12/08/can-we-guess-your-characters-age/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-69425215127621898942011-12-08T20:57:08.155+00:002011-12-08T20:57:08.155+00:00I wanted to guess 13-15 but wasn't quite sure....I wanted to guess 13-15 but wasn't quite sure... not many tells. I will say that the first sentence grabbed me, but I had to re-read the whole first paragraph a couple of times.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07995267172282765794noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-15429429626602732012011-12-08T20:15:09.354+00:002011-12-08T20:15:09.354+00:00I'm guessing 12ish. This is great for raising ...I'm guessing 12ish. This is great for raising questions too. I'm wondering about the game and the Collective. Nice job.<br /><br />And, I'm definitely entering. I'd better do it now so I don't forget.Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-40022738945475058532011-12-08T19:52:24.655+00:002011-12-08T19:52:24.655+00:00Tough momma he has. Sounds like a tough world, too...Tough momma he has. Sounds like a tough world, too. I'll guess 14.Jesi O'Connellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03973548668462141343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-79611487441984092972011-12-08T18:51:58.148+00:002011-12-08T18:51:58.148+00:00I'm also guessing in the 11- 13 range. This is...I'm also guessing in the 11- 13 range. This is an intriguing beginning and a great set up.<br /><br />I think you could improve the voice by keeping a tighter POV on the Mortimer character. Just something to think about.Julie Daineshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08350205936357263571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7673700697394236559.post-74325860541752018212011-12-08T17:04:53.093+00:002011-12-08T17:04:53.093+00:00He seems youngish. Maybe 13? A lot of worldbuildin...He seems youngish. Maybe 13? A lot of worldbuilding here! Good job.Kell Andrewshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18089691866850131698noreply@blogger.com